Like a Ridged Cove, I long for more.
Where are the wild things
that flow from my heart?
hide them and scold them
now is that so smart?
I'm just one another
walk through me like dust
part of the air
to linger and rust
deny me your love
I laugh at the dew
that lies on my lips
stinging so blue
We live in this time
you lived in the past
when faces were faces
within me to grasp
The years on the cove
scar deep in the sand
give me another
from your guided hand
Reach up and just take it
the life you desire
burning inside
eternal fire.
Author's comment: Don't know where this came from. I'm just sitting here on a late Sunday...thinking, wishing, wanting.
What does it mean to you?
posted by Kathy at 8:59 PM
3 Comments:
I think of it as the speaker attempting to revisit a time of more freedom - both personally and communally. There is a challenge to move beyond the commonplace - beyond the life you're given - and toward something extraordinary: toward the life you want.
Not to get nit picky, but the one word that really seemed out of place to me was "lived" in the line "We lived in this time." Because it is past tense, it seems to suggest that the speaker is reach back to us from the afterlife. Which would work fine, except that the challenge at the end seems to work more effectively if the speaker is among us. I'd make that present tense.
I really like how "love" as a theme works throughout the poem. Overtly, in the first stanza and the third, with subtlety in the last stanza.
7:50 AM
Also, I think you should incorporate some images from the ridged cove. Maybe a stanza that brings the title forward a bit.
7:57 AM
Opps- I meant "live"
interesting perspective BTW. I added another stanza to tie in the title.
Thanks for the feedback!
9:10 AM
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